The first section makes me think of all the things that tie people to the body: desire, sirens, the amygdala. Makes me think of the story I am working on now. Cool stuff.
I imagine the boat as us being tossed from one uncontrollable chaos into another along streams of accumulated karma. Good image.
"maelstrom of delirious beauty" *chefs kiss*
The description of the tornado is awesome! All inside cannot escape, like a jail, but it also has a cyclical form.
Then crossing of the dark churning is necessary to get back home.
Yo Martin! Thanks for the detailed read! Always enjoy hearing your perspective, I found interesting your first comment cause it made me think almost of a platonistic reading of it, with the bodily ties that keep it from ascending. Cheers! Edit: And I'll be expecting that story!!
Oh, wow, thanks! It can be a tricky mid-ground using many rare words, too much and it might discourage people! But I’m glad from your testimony to know it had a positive incentive! Thanks so much Rasmus!
Benno! Hope all is doing good over there!
The first section makes me think of all the things that tie people to the body: desire, sirens, the amygdala. Makes me think of the story I am working on now. Cool stuff.
I imagine the boat as us being tossed from one uncontrollable chaos into another along streams of accumulated karma. Good image.
"maelstrom of delirious beauty" *chefs kiss*
The description of the tornado is awesome! All inside cannot escape, like a jail, but it also has a cyclical form.
Then crossing of the dark churning is necessary to get back home.
Yo Martin! Thanks for the detailed read! Always enjoy hearing your perspective, I found interesting your first comment cause it made me think almost of a platonistic reading of it, with the bodily ties that keep it from ascending. Cheers! Edit: And I'll be expecting that story!!
Gorgeous play with words, Benno! Brilliantly done.
Thank you very much Rea!!
I love how you structured the poem. It really fits the text.
Thanks a lot Trevor, I'm happy to know it came out well!
This is fantastic Benno! Really enjoyed the repetition! Also you use a lot of interesting terminology that kept me on my toes.
It is a great pleasure researching words and references from your poems and seeing the meaning unfold slowly.
Very rich and profound poem!
Oh, wow, thanks! It can be a tricky mid-ground using many rare words, too much and it might discourage people! But I’m glad from your testimony to know it had a positive incentive! Thanks so much Rasmus!